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posted 5th Oct 2012, 12:47 PM

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5th Oct 2012, 12:47 PM

Jetyl

Behold the Exposition!!!

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7th Jan 2013, 1:08 AM

ranger_brianna_new

I quite enjoy the exposition (along with the lampshading ensuing around it :P), though it does have a few typos: "inraged" should be "enraged", "like mined people" should be "like minded people" (though 'like-minded', with the apostrophe, is more common), and "more advaced" should be "more advanced".

Silly English language with all of its weird spellings. :P

It does have an upside, though--synonyms, and some helpful advice, you might wanna look into some for the future--there's quite a bit of repetition in the exposition, which throwing in some synonyms would help remove. (For instance, the panel where "rest of the world" is used three times.)


I hope that this actually helps, and is not me just being obnoxious. :P

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