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posted 3rd Mar 2013, 9:56 AM

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3rd Mar 2013, 9:56 AM

Jetyl

and there's the end of chapter one. not a big explosive end, but it serves its purpose.

now a few question I'm dying to ask: what do you think of the chapter, and the characters?

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3rd Mar 2013, 1:47 PM

ranger_brianna_new

The characters are great, and the chapter was fine.

Small critique, though--on this page, the dialog order is a bit of a mess. I eventually worked out what was being said when, but the page didn't have an easily-found intuitive order.

Not sure what could be done to fix it, but it's something you should keep an eye on.

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