and there's the end of chapter one. not a big explosive end, but it serves its purpose.
now a few question I'm dying to ask: what do you think of the chapter, and the characters?
The characters are great, and the chapter was fine.
Small critique, though--on this page, the dialog order is a bit of a mess. I eventually worked out what was being said when, but the page didn't have an easily-found intuitive order.
Not sure what could be done to fix it, but it's something you should keep an eye on.